“Efe and Ekene” by Eric Omoruyi is a short story first published in Nigeria by Mindex Publishing Company. It follows Efe, a young boy from a large family, as he transitions from his village to the bustling city of Abuja to continue his education. There, he forms an instant connection with Ekene, a domestic servant he meets in his brother’s house.
The story unfolds in a straightforward, descriptive manner. This approach might be particularly appealing to students accustomed to a clear narrative style in their studies. However, some readers might find the pacing slightly uneven due to the prevalence of “telling” over “showing” details. This can occasionally lead to scenes, like the interactions between Efe and Ekene, feeling a bit drawn out. As Jennifer Nansubuga Makumbi reminds us, “The short story is one of the most difficult forms for a writer… It is, among many other things, urgent, demanding.” So while the plot has potential, introducing some conflict or tension earlier on could have increased the story’s engagement factor.
Despite these shortcomings, “Efe and Ekene” boasts several strengths. The characters are relatable. Efe has an endearing mix of naivety and maturity that makes him someone readers can easily root for. Ekene’s caring nature complements him well, and Mr. Peter’s portrayal as a responsible yet authoritative figure adds a not-too-often-seen layer of familial dynamics. Also, the story excels at conveying emotions. We experience Efe’s bittersweet farewell to his family and his hopeful anticipation of life in Abuja with raw sincerity. The relationship between Efe and Ekene, with its tenderness and innocence, evokes a sense of nostalgia reminiscent of childhood adventures and the stories we devoured back then.
Perhaps this story could benefit from being expanded into a novella. The narrative feels rushed at times, and the ending, while offering a glimpse into Efe’s adult life, seems abrupt.
Ultimately, “Efe and Ekene” is best suited for readers who appreciate character-driven narratives with a coming-of-age theme.
Rating: 3/5
